Sunday, March 06, 2016

The Real (Painful) Thing

Time again for Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday!




Here's another snippet from my YA coming-of-age mystery, Shades of Blue. (You can catch up on the earlier excerpts here.) Last week Sam and JoJo shared their first kiss, and it was everything and more that JoJo hoped it would be. This scene skips ahead to the next day after school.


We talked about the usual school stuff the rest of the way to the Minit Mart, and we were still holding hands when we stopped to get a Coke. I didn’t see Chip and his two stupid friends behind the comic book rack until it was too late.

“Look, guys,” Chip said as they walked toward us, “Sam finally got up the nerve to hold her hand, and it only took him ten years to do it."

Freddy and Danny yukked it up like the total morons they were, and the three of them walked toward us.

“Just think, Sammy-boy,” Chip went on. “Only five more years and you’ll be feeling her up like I did yesterday.”

Before Sam could say a word or do anything to stop me, I grabbed a can of Coke from the tub of ice by the counter and chunked it at Chip’s head. It bounced off the cowlick at his crown and landed in the middle of a loaf of Wonder Bread on a rack nearby. He stumbled backward into Freddy, and they fell against the comic book rack and knocked it over.

“How did that feel, Chip,” I said, “because it felt pretty damn good to me!”



Glad to see everything that happened didn't make JoJo lose her mojo, huh? Next week we'll find out a little about Sam's real dad who left when he was a toddler. Or you could always go buy your own copy of Shades of Blue here. ;-) Please also check out the other Snippet Sunday folks and the Weekend Writing Warriors. Something for everyone among these talented writers!

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22 comments:

  1. I love a girl who doesn't pull her punches!
    You go, girl!

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  2. I love a good action scene. Sounds like my type of girl. Loved the snippet, as always.

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  3. Go JoJo! I love it when bullies fall like dominoes!

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  4. I like JoJo's spirit, wonder what will happen next? Great snippet!

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  5. lol! Love it! You have written such a great character in JoJo! This story is so painstakingly believable. It's like you went back in time and empathized with the angst of being a tweener again, Joyce. :-)

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  6. Good for her. Glad she has a great aim.

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  7. Ah, the budding rapist and budding baseball player. He deserved it. Great snippet, Joyce.

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  8. Great throw. This jerk needs to learn she isn't a pushover.

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  9. She's my kind of girl! I hate bullies.

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  10. Jojo sounds totally cool. I'm glad she nailed him in the head.
    I can't wait to read more.

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  11. Woot! What a great moment. I remember all too well how good it felt to finally strike back against a bully. What you wrote is pretty much how it felt. Nice!

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  12. Now that's way to get at it! Good job Jojo!

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  13. I love the description of the scene where she throws the can ... absolutely brilliantly done ... AND GO GIRL! What a ripper of a reply :-)

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  14. Yeah! Hit him again! Great snippet!

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  15. Wow, she's a firecracker. I love it! Especially when a character does something that I'm already itching to do after only hearing the jerk say a couple of lines. Well done.

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  16. I'm only sorry that the can of soda didn't get embedded in his head!
    Cheering for her. I really like her spunk and the fact that she stood up for herself.

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  17. Yes!! Good for her. Gotta love the, er, "candor" of teenage boys! ::rolls eyes::

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  18. I'm sure there'll be repercussions from this (there's no way Chip will let this go), but it's what the heat of the moment called for. Great job depicting your characters so realistically!

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  19. That was all kinds of awesome. :) :) :)

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  20. Bwahaha! Good for her! Not backing down! I like this girl's attitude. However, methinks she shouldn't have done that in a mini mart where police could get involved for assault or reckless behavior when things were knocked over... You know, considering what Sam asked of her about the cops and his secret...

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