Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday!
Continuing with excerpts from my coming-of-age/YA/mystery WIP, Shades of Blue, this week's eight sentences show the aftermath of Sam and JoJo's wrestling match gone wrong and JoJo's strange dream about Sam in his underwear. (You can catch up on earlier excerpts here.)
The following Monday, Sam and I didn’t talk at all in the car while Daddy drove us to school, and Sam walked away without saying a word when we got there. I reminded myself of my decision to give him some time and resisted the urge to call him a rude butthead. Remarkable restraint, in my opinion.
We ignored each other all morning, but when I saw him at lunch, sitting at a different table from our regular one, I decided his time was up and he was gonna talk to me whether he wanted to or not. I started toward him but stopped after three steps because Melissa Caton and Cindy Rester sat down on either side of him in a gush-and-giggle duet.
I was glad to see that at least Sam still blushed the way he'd always done when confronted with any girl who wasn't me. When he looked up and met my gaze, I thought for sure he’d send me a silent message to rescue him and we’d be back to normal again, but all he did was look away and nod in response to something Melissa said. She and Cindy giggled some more, then I heard one of them say something about Sam playing quarterback. I turned to walk away in disgust and collided with Chip Wiley’s smirking face.
Remember Chip? He's the one who broke JoJo's bathing suit top at the creek and got punched by Sam for it. Tune in next week to see how he makes things worse.
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18 comments:
Love the shirt in the picture--perfection!
Keep the words coming, please! :)
Love that scene and I don't like Chip. But I feel something coming. Great snippet. :-)
Love your drama here (and that T-shirt in the pic is to die for!)
Real good one! :)
Somethins a brewin look out chip!
Love that T-Shirt ROFL!
Cindy Ramirez
Drama, drama, drama-- I love it!
Great snippet. I want more!
Total high school drama right there. You nailed it for sure. Great scene.
beautiful sentence structure Joyce. And love the T shirt!
Oh my, I have a feeling where this is all going and I can't wait to keep reading. You really captured the feelings of the heroine so well! Terrific snippet!
I love that shirt, I've a few family members who could use it, though I'm not sure they'd get the hint.
I love the steady cadence your snippet has. Very, very nice job.
The "gush-and-giggle duet" made me smile and I can just picture these girls. :-) Clever phrasing. I think it's inevitable that Sam and JoJo will get together. Chip certainly seems smarmy. Looking forward to the next instalment.
Melissa, Cindy and Chip need a punishment of some kind. Maybe we could strand them together on an island somewhere?
This is so well-written. Felt very authentic to me. Love the gush and giggle duet. I think we've all met those girls.
Love the shirt too!
Great excerpt. Sounds very authentic.
The "remarkable restraint" made me laugh :)
And anyone with a smirking face deserves a punch.
I just caught up on all your excerpts from this story - and I'm absolutely loving it. Thanks for sharing!
The ups and downs of emotion in this snippet is really well done.
Chip's smirking - always a bad sign. Nice snippet.
You have such a great voice! The gush and giggle duet phrase is just fabulous.
Oh man, Sam shouldn't ignore JoJo, and I suspect Chip is just the man to get him to move. Nice snippet, Joyce. I'm really enjoying your story. :)
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